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Introduction paragraph: Confucius’ The Analects discussed many attributes which an ideal government should possess, such as, loyalty, a love of learning, and conducting oneself with the utmost integrity.

Paragraph 1 first sentence: Loyalty was talked about again and again.

Paragraph 2 first sentence: Confucius talked about how one must learn and absorb knowledge given.

Paragraph 3 first sentence: Conducting oneself with the utmost integrity was, also, an ideal characteristic of government.

Conclusion paragraph: Confucius’ ideal government should possess attributes, such as, loyalty, a love of learning, and conducting themselves with utmost integrity. He gave examples of these and many more in “The Analects.”